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better positive scene and negative scene, I had to leave out some details in order to give my readers the image I wanted them to feel. In the first paragraph of my first angle of vision, I showed the readers that the fence was rough splintered, faded red, with a crooked elliptical topped gate. While in the second angle of vision, I showed my reader that the fence was red with an elliptical topped gate which sounds positive. I talked about a parking lot in both angles of vision. In my second, I omitted that the lot was jaded with bottomless potholes, filled with cracked brittle concrete as if it was appalling to my readers. While in the second I said the lot was spacious and well-established, making it sound appealing to my readers. Also in my first vision I omitted the frisky,

golden brown, fluffy tailed squirrel gracefully moving around the backyard, as it makes a tightrope circus act come alive. Focusing more on the tainted depreciated car, which struggles to start and the rackety exhaust and rasping brake pads coming from the congested river of traffic a block away. To make the most effective paragraphs I had to watch my word choice and use different emotional connotations to describe the two scenes. For my essay, I sat in the backyard of my duplex observing all the activities around me. I started off setting the image, in the first sentences of the paragraph of my negative impression. I described the backyard as being a confined compound of my blood colored brick duplex. In the positive vision I described my backyard as being a lively compound of

my red-rose colored brick duplex. In the negative impression I used words like jaded, depreciated, unsympathetic, and unreliable, yet in the positive I used words like pleasant, aspired, smooth, and eager. In the first vision my readers heard bodies exhausted from another stressful workday. While in the second vision my readers heard smiling grateful people have a sense of fulfillment on their faces, from another challenging workday. In my first impression the immense rolling bank of clouds resembles a tidal wave, engulfing the harsh dark blue sky while in the second the sky assembles ocean waves of rolling clouds, bringing a smell of a needed rain. In the second the wind elevates yellowish, golden brown leaves, that blanket the ground, sending them flying in a round about way.

Although in the first the roaring cold wind waters my eyes; it elevates dead piles of leafs, that clutter the dry brownish yellow grass backyard. Also I said I saw, leaves form a corkscrew tornado shape. And that the, tornado uplifts hoary, weather faded, yellow filtered, cigarette butts, as it goes along its way. Also in the first I said I could hear people slamming their car doors as if that was their relief for having a bad day. While in the second I said the people hurry eagerly to get to the serenity, and pleasant warmth of their homes, swiftly closing their car doors, heading on. I wanted my readers to think of the people as being in a bad mood in my first angle. That is why I said they slam their car doors making it sound negative. Although, in the second angle I wanted my

readers to think of the people as being eager, wanting to get home, swiftly closing their car doors, doing it this way didn t make is sound so negative. In the two descriptions I used figurative language to convey the overall positive and negative impressions. I said that the squirrel makes a circus tightrope act come alive as it traipses on the swaying lines with impressive balance, in my positive impression. In my negative impression I said that the congested river of traffic which flows through the busy intersection a block away has sounds of rackety exhaust and rasping brake pads coming from it. Also I described the clouds in both angle of visions. In the positive impression I wanted my readers to think of the clouds as ocean waves although in the negative vision. I wanted my

reader to think of the clouds as, tidal waves. Describing the clouds in this way painted a picture of the clouds as a nasty tidal wave, and in the other as ocean waves, giving my readers something they could relate to. For sentence structure, I had to change only one of my sentences around a little bit to achieve the impression I wanted my readers to feel and see. For example, I said that the elliptical topped gate fence boarded the yard. of my lively backyard in my positive angle of vision. However, in my negative angle of vision I said, behind the elliptical topped gate fence is a parking lot and that my backyard is, confined. The whole goal behind that statement was for me to focus more on what the fence was separating me from in my negative angle of vision, and how confined